Hm...
Not bad entirely, but it's the fact that it sound like everything you used were samples and...
Near the end, the clash that I hear between the basses is kind of...X_x
It's a good start though. And as soon as you can, kind of translate from using alot of samples, to using some of the easy features like the slayer or keys.
And another thing that is cool is that I made a song using the same synth that you used in the beginning.
If you want to check it out, look me up and listen to Hands in the Haze.
And I'm going to have to favorite this because your song gave me an awesome idea for a song!!!
Thanks so much man!!